http://kallaneboi.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] kallaneboi.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] originalsam_backup 2011-01-09 05:01 pm (UTC)

I think if you changed the first "but" to "though" it'd read better.

He could steal your soul if you let him draw you, though he wouldn't (but he had once).
(58 comments)

Post a comment in response:

This account has disabled anonymous posting.
If you don't have an account you can create one now.
HTML doesn't work in the subject.
More info about formatting
 
Notice: This account is set to log the IP addresses of everyone who comments.
Links will be displayed as unclickable URLs to help prevent spam.