Well, you know me, disheartening is sometimes a side effect of good crit -- which is to say I appreciate it.

For me the problem is -- if there is a description, say, of Naomi in that moment, it kind of feels shoehorned in, very expositionary. It's something I need to work on, because not only am I bad at description but this is the first large cast I've put into a novel, so. New challenges :)

High double digits is a bad phrase, yeah, you're not the only one who noticed that. I've changed it :)