Sparks usually left SparkVISION at 4:30 sharp, bound south to a weekly board meeting Bound south? Maybe I've been looking at the sentence too long (you know how if you stare at a word long enough, it doesn't look like a real word any more?) but it reads awkwardly to me.
Anyway! Mostly commenting to say I LOVE the whole couch-moving thing. I especially giggled at Jess - "That looks like an awkward place to put a sofa". =D
I noticed your post today, about the work you've put into characterisation, and it's coming through. It's not glaring or obvious, we're not being spoon-fed, but as an example? The bit in this chapter about John's neuroses has filled in some blanks about his personality and his relationship with Cee, and I feel like I know them better. CG might have been hell on earth to rewrite, but whatever you did, it's working!
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Bound south? Maybe I've been looking at the sentence too long (you know how if you stare at a word long enough, it doesn't look like a real word any more?) but it reads awkwardly to me.
Anyway! Mostly commenting to say I LOVE the whole couch-moving thing. I especially giggled at Jess - "That looks like an awkward place to put a sofa". =D
I noticed your post today, about the work you've put into characterisation, and it's coming through. It's not glaring or obvious, we're not being spoon-fed, but as an example? The bit in this chapter about John's neuroses has filled in some blanks about his personality and his relationship with Cee, and I feel like I know them better.
CG might have been hell on earth to rewrite, but whatever you did, it's working!