spiderine ([identity profile] spiderine.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] originalsam_backup 2010-10-02 09:33 pm (UTC)

of the slightly-battered leather lobby couch

--> hyphenating adverbs that amplify adjectives makes me cry.

plugging in cords with what seemed to John like reckless abandon.

---> with what seemed to John to be reckless abandon.

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