Someone wrote in [community profile] originalsam_backup 2010-10-04 09:13 pm (UTC)

"I think it's cool," Cee decided. "It's only lame if people find out he's Non Prophet. That could be trouble."

"Why? Everyone likes him," Roxy said.

"Not everyone," Sarah replied. "He's been in trouble before. A lot of local news sites won't link to him."


It's a little unclear who they were referring to here - it was hard to tell whether the "he" was Sparks or Non. Like, has Sparks been in trouble or do people not want to link to Non?
Obviously they're talking about Non, but it took me a re-read or two to work it out. Can we maybe have an "everybody likes Non" instead of "everybody likes him"?


Also, awesome opening line! Although Cee should be thankful she gets that long...

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