ext_14849 ([identity profile] copperbadge.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] originalsam_backup 2011-01-11 06:49 pm (UTC)

I like the idea, but I think it might run counter to the goal of those first few chapters. The main issue people seem to be having is that without a more thorough and emotionally charged version of the backstory, to show connections and emotions, things end up being a little chilly and disconnected. The timeskips are really a minor issue compared to the fact that people aren't getting enough information -- I think withholding even more might just make people lose interest. It's something to play with, but I don't think the basic setup moments work if there's nothing driving behind them.

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