Sounds like you had fun in NYC! These are still well in time to be helpful, thank you :) No particular deadline, I'm going to be typesetting for at least another week or two.
Addressing the issues you've brought up, mostly just making tweaks, but to answer your question about Colin's "mask" tattoo, I was thinking primarily of Maori facial tattoos, but also sort of melding them with Venetian carnevale/masquerade masks:
Regarding theft in prison -- most prison commodities are consumables. Food can be hidden in cells, and cigarettes are generic for the most part. Clothing and bedding can be generic, often, and bedding wouldn't necessarily be seen by other people, in single-man cells. I'll see if I can clarify that.
Re: Ch 10-12C
Addressing the issues you've brought up, mostly just making tweaks, but to answer your question about Colin's "mask" tattoo, I was thinking primarily of Maori facial tattoos, but also sort of melding them with Venetian carnevale/masquerade masks:
http://profile.ak.fbcdn.net/hprofile-ak-snc4/41575_39567146391_2956564_n.jpg
http://im.quirao2.com/qimage/p/moy300/p1/casanova-baroque-or-masque-venise-151.jpg
Regarding theft in prison -- most prison commodities are consumables. Food can be hidden in cells, and cigarettes are generic for the most part. Clothing and bedding can be generic, often, and bedding wouldn't necessarily be seen by other people, in single-man cells. I'll see if I can clarify that.