ext_1686 ([identity profile] maeritrae.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] originalsam_backup 2012-04-28 09:14 pm (UTC)

any rate..." he smiled gently. I think that should be He, because it's the start of a new sentence. You aren't using smiled as a substitute for said, which is the only time that the sentence fragment coming after a quote shouldn't have a capital letter. I'm not sure if that sentence made sense, but I've noticed you doing something similar in a few other places. You might want to go through the whole file looking for ellipses and think whether you really want to put small letters after them, because I think most of the time you shouldn't. Like ""And laid on some food?" the last with an almost desperately hopeful look.". That definitely should have a capital letter.

I am quite tired and going home for some food and a snack. But it has been a productive day - an extremely productive day - and reading a few chapters of The Dead Isle has improved it immensely.

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