Can you note something with irony? Irony has always confused me, so maybe you can.
"Sixteen years. you're shy by three."
"Seventeen, you're shy of twenty."
I'm very, very confused by this. I know what you're going for, and I really want it to work because yay Ellis and Clare banter. But it sounds like Clare is saying she's 16 and he's 16 * 2 - 3 = 29, and I know what you mean is that she's 19 and he's 36. Also, you should have capitalised the you're in the first bit, or made it a semicolon.
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"Sixteen years. you're shy by three."
"Seventeen, you're shy of twenty."
I'm very, very confused by this. I know what you're going for, and I really want it to work because yay Ellis and Clare banter. But it sounds like Clare is saying she's 16 and he's 16 * 2 - 3 = 29, and I know what you mean is that she's 19 and he's 36. Also, you should have capitalised the you're in the first bit, or made it a semicolon.