Well, you know me, disheartening is sometimes a side effect of good crit -- which is to say I appreciate it.
For me the problem is -- if there is a description, say, of Naomi in that moment, it kind of feels shoehorned in, very expositionary. It's something I need to work on, because not only am I bad at description but this is the first large cast I've put into a novel, so. New challenges :)
High double digits is a bad phrase, yeah, you're not the only one who noticed that. I've changed it :)
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Date: 2010-01-18 05:47 pm (UTC)For me the problem is -- if there is a description, say, of Naomi in that moment, it kind of feels shoehorned in, very expositionary. It's something I need to work on, because not only am I bad at description but this is the first large cast I've put into a novel, so. New challenges :)
High double digits is a bad phrase, yeah, you're not the only one who noticed that. I've changed it :)