Sparks is officially my favorite character, fyi. I love his reactions (especially when he wanted to break Union Arms's finger).
The interactions between limited groups of characters are still hella fun to read. I like that you incorporated the doors from your office to ruin UA's storm out. And really, he needs to get over himself. I was expecting something from him. Good delivery.
The cookie mission was adorable.
Good, fun chapter! I'm not seeing much to critique.
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Date: 2010-01-25 02:59 am (UTC)The interactions between limited groups of characters are still hella fun to read. I like that you incorporated the doors from your office to ruin UA's storm out. And really, he needs to get over himself. I was expecting something from him. Good delivery.
The cookie mission was adorable.
Good, fun chapter! I'm not seeing much to critique.