Date: 2010-01-25 09:09 pm (UTC)
I'm not even sure if it's that he needs to be sleezier exactly...but I feel like there wasn't enough of a lead up to him being a jerk to Sparkes. Anna has a sort of bad feeling about him at one point but...well, wanting to buy someone shiny things is not necessarily indicative of being a horrible person. I almost want to see a brief snippet of conversation between Anna and UA at dinner in Ch.5 ( I think?) Something to indicate that he goes to swanky places because he feels entitled to it (or something like that?) It might help set up for the impression that he feels he's entitled to get the opinion he wants from Sparks.

All that being said, I think this story is brilliant, and makes me want to take my law degree and go work in non-profit. Also, I may not have read the subtext the way you meant for it to be read, at which point feel free to ignore the previous comment. :)
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