I love how Non's post about the astroturfing scandal has been expanded and refined since the first draft!
Also, as I think I mentioned in a comment on the previous chapter, I very much like John and Cee's relationship appearing from the outside first (locked in the copier room with the very delicate toner) and from the inside second (John's inner-monologue anxieties about sharing the couch), rather than the reverse as I think they were in draft 1.
(Also, I seem to have nothing constructive to say, but keep commenting anyway 'cause I want to laud so many of the changes you've made)
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Date: 2010-10-03 11:55 pm (UTC)Also, as I think I mentioned in a comment on the previous chapter, I very much like John and Cee's relationship appearing from the outside first (locked in the copier room with the very delicate toner) and from the inside second (John's inner-monologue anxieties about sharing the couch), rather than the reverse as I think they were in draft 1.
(Also, I seem to have nothing constructive to say, but keep commenting anyway 'cause I want to laud so many of the changes you've made)
~ c.