I think I may end up dropping the sentence entirely or shifting it simply because I need to move some flashbacks up -- I hate to lose this prologue as a freestanding entity, but I might need to put the call from Hoboken after this. :D I think that might resolve some of the in media res issues with chapter one -- if I can have Colin call Joseph, then show Joseph and Colin in the car, that builds up their relationship as well.
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