That stupid rail line, omg, it's going to be the end of me :D Here's what I have now:
Raul's Diner in midtown Manhattan had a pretty little patio that looked out on the street, divided from the sidewalk by a thin railing. Colin's long legs were currently propped on the rail, his chair tipped back and balanced precariously.
The bit with Henrik isn't new but the NAME Henrik is new, and it's been made clearer what happened, which I think is where the sensation of newness is coming in.
As for the eggs -- I have no idea what happens when you burn an egg but you'd have to do it at a pretty high temperature. When I was grilling more often, I'd cook my food on the grill and while I was eating I'd put a few eggs wrapped in foil in the cooling ashes, and it hard-cooked them perfectly. It's very hard to actually burn an egg.
no matter what you do with it, no matter how you frame it, cop+convict+cop'swife is a distinctly surprising romance, even if one sets aside one's cultural programming regarding the normalcy of threesomes.
Yeah. The threesome's never going to be perfect, I've kind of resigned myself -- but the story works better with than without, as I found in one of the many other draft twos. :D
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Date: 2011-06-24 01:37 pm (UTC)Raul's Diner in midtown Manhattan had a pretty little patio that looked out on the street, divided from the sidewalk by a thin railing. Colin's long legs were currently propped on the rail, his chair tipped back and balanced precariously.
The bit with Henrik isn't new but the NAME Henrik is new, and it's been made clearer what happened, which I think is where the sensation of newness is coming in.
As for the eggs -- I have no idea what happens when you burn an egg but you'd have to do it at a pretty high temperature. When I was grilling more often, I'd cook my food on the grill and while I was eating I'd put a few eggs wrapped in foil in the cooling ashes, and it hard-cooked them perfectly. It's very hard to actually burn an egg.
no matter what you do with it, no matter how you frame it, cop+convict+cop'swife is a distinctly surprising romance, even if one sets aside one's cultural programming regarding the normalcy of threesomes.
Yeah. The threesome's never going to be perfect, I've kind of resigned myself -- but the story works better with than without, as I found in one of the many other draft twos. :D