I like Purva's introduction here. I remember thinking that the earlier draft was a little harder to follow, but this wasn't. I'll probably reread this tomorrow when I'm a bit more coherent, but the only comma nitpick for today is this: and she hasn't got anything to go back to really – comma before ‘really’
As for Clare and Anderson not being harmed since they're Creationists, I was very confused about that the first time I read it, too. I've read it once and didn't make a note to check for that earlier, but it seems like a little more clarification somewhere might help. I know it's because they're natives - it's Creationists who try and go to Australia but aren't from there who are harmed. Right? But I'm not sure I know that from this read-through or because I already read the whole thing before.... And Jack says he can't do much - but Ellis can't do much, either, though he was creating flame for Anderson's cigarette at one scene earlier....
Argh. Note to self: you're not much help to Sam when you're worn out from your day.
Sorry, but I wanted to make sure I commented that the "why isn't Clare in danger" thing confused me a great deal the first time I read it as well. And the comma. :D Can't leave a comma unattended....
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Date: 2012-05-02 03:04 am (UTC)As for Clare and Anderson not being harmed since they're Creationists, I was very confused about that the first time I read it, too. I've read it once and didn't make a note to check for that earlier, but it seems like a little more clarification somewhere might help. I know it's because they're natives - it's Creationists who try and go to Australia but aren't from there who are harmed. Right? But I'm not sure I know that from this read-through or because I already read the whole thing before.... And Jack says he can't do much - but Ellis can't do much, either, though he was creating flame for Anderson's cigarette at one scene earlier....
Argh. Note to self: you're not much help to Sam when you're worn out from your day.
Sorry, but I wanted to make sure I commented that the "why isn't Clare in danger" thing confused me a great deal the first time I read it as well. And the comma. :D Can't leave a comma unattended....