"Makes you wonder how long they were planning on having a capital city," he said - this is a bit ambiguous. It sound like Ellis means he wonders how long they were planning to keep having a capital city rather than how long the capital city was in the planning stages.
Jack nodded, and the man set the books on the table, unrolling the new map on top of the old. The paper was strange, fibrous and discolored, but once it was unrolled that hardly mattered. Jack sucked in a breath admiringly.
"This is amazing," he murmured, spreading his hands over the map, not touching it. The coast boundaries were nothing more than rough squiggles, but the entire interior of the continent was covered with scrawls, spirals, figures, and odd shapes in a variety of colors. In one corner, a figure knelt as if in prayer. In another part, a bright green snake wound around the base of a jutting rocky outcrop. Port Darwin was a black smudge surrounded in fine, even-spaced emerald dots. Brisbane was a bright splash of yellow. Canberra was blank, but he thought the large white square, like a ship's sail, might be Melbourne.
"And this is water?" Jack asked, pointing to several blue smears.
The tribal map part doesn't ring true to me. This gets really complicated and I don't know what research you've done and feedback you've had in this area previously. So, before I go on I'm going to ask if you want feedback on this because I'd probably pick apart most of it. I could probably come up with a few simple work arounds though with a bit of added research (which I'm happy to do - it would involve going to the art gallery and the museum which are some of my favourite things to do anyway).
(I need to go eat lots of sugar now: this is the comment in lieu of the original comment which was very long and got bogged down in complexities. Then I'll need to go to bed.)
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Date: 2012-05-09 04:25 pm (UTC)Jack nodded, and the man set the books on the table, unrolling the new map on top of the old. The paper was strange, fibrous and discolored, but once it was unrolled that hardly mattered. Jack sucked in a breath admiringly.
"This is amazing," he murmured, spreading his hands over the map, not touching it. The coast boundaries were nothing more than rough squiggles, but the entire interior of the continent was covered with scrawls, spirals, figures, and odd shapes in a variety of colors. In one corner, a figure knelt as if in prayer. In another part, a bright green snake wound around the base of a jutting rocky outcrop. Port Darwin was a black smudge surrounded in fine, even-spaced emerald dots. Brisbane was a bright splash of yellow. Canberra was blank, but he thought the large white square, like a ship's sail, might be Melbourne.
"And this is water?" Jack asked, pointing to several blue smears.
The tribal map part doesn't ring true to me. This gets really complicated and I don't know what research you've done and feedback you've had in this area previously. So, before I go on I'm going to ask if you want feedback on this because I'd probably pick apart most of it. I could probably come up with a few simple work arounds though with a bit of added research (which I'm happy to do - it would involve going to the art gallery and the museum which are some of my favourite things to do anyway).
(I need to go eat lots of sugar now: this is the comment in lieu of the original comment which was very long and got bogged down in complexities. Then I'll need to go to bed.)