I am about to be in the minority, and I know this isn't something you'll probably change because I understand what a big element naming is in here, but....
I really dislike Clare's name change. having her be Clare for 9/10ths of a novel and then Murra sits ill with me, and I'm not sure I know why. I do like Dina's reference to her as Murra-Clare, and maybe that would work? Some kind of blending of her two worlds? It's just hard to recontextualize. And I realize Jack and Ellis and all of them have to do the same thing, but it's even more jarring for a reader.
He moved at the same time Memory did, but the other man got there first Confused as to who the other man is, since Mem isn't a man. I'm guessing this is Ellis re: Jack, but wasn't sure.
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Date: 2012-05-15 10:46 pm (UTC)I really dislike Clare's name change. having her be Clare for 9/10ths of a novel and then Murra sits ill with me, and I'm not sure I know why. I do like Dina's reference to her as Murra-Clare, and maybe that would work? Some kind of blending of her two worlds? It's just hard to recontextualize. And I realize Jack and Ellis and all of them have to do the same thing, but it's even more jarring for a reader.
He moved at the same time Memory did, but the other man got there first Confused as to who the other man is, since Mem isn't a man. I'm guessing this is Ellis re: Jack, but wasn't sure.